Tuesday, January 29, 2008

Blog 2- Fire on the mountain

Why do they be so mean to me? i don't do nothing but try to help them out. Jack is so mean his not the leader. I'm an officious person. they never listen to me, they take my specs with out my permission. They tumult gets higher when Ralph tries to talk. they try to make a fire and they take warp tree branches and the fire was irresistible they couldn't get enough of it.I started to nimble quickly as ralph was starting gthe fire. as the fire was getting bigger and bigger the fire was next an old tree and set that half of the trees on fire. I looked at Jack and Ralph and the others they all had a scronfully smile on their faces. I started to yell at them" Are you guys crazy you just set half of the trees on fires. where is half of the kids now? you wouldn't know because your so worry abot ths fire that you didn't pay attention to none of the little ones? Ralph looked at me with ashame in his eyes. " What are you talking about Piggy we do know how many little ones are there?" Ralph said with worry voice. "Then how many are there Ralph, How many? where is the little one with the birthmark on is face? I replied. Ralph looked at me like he just saw a ghost or something." I.... I don't know where he is?" That's my point you guys are to busy about his fire that you didn't know that he ran off to get some fruit? every body was quiet no one said a word all you can hear the wind blowing and bird flying away.

1 comment:

Emma Christenfeld said...

Kadijah-
Can you capitalize? I think you confused nimble with nibble. Can you check the usage of that? Also check paragraphing. You're a great writer and I look forward to your next blog.
-Emma